like to see changed. if you never read any of my journals PLEASE just read this one.
1. There is a very, very, privileged sense of "artistic" license here, where people say things that make fucking no complete sense whatsoever just because it sounds "poetic", i.e something like "your fingernails were purple bears dipped in melted manna that made my hair dance like tuesday morning." fucking FIRST of all, a metaphor has to have some actual point of comparison
(via Wikipedia) to make the unlikely comparison fucking viable and valid. i don't give a fuck what kind of explanation you have for a sentence like that one, IT'S COMPLETE NONSENSE AND BULLSHIT. in no fucking way, shape, or form are fingernails like purple bears. "you see what i'm talking about here is one time i was on a camping trip with my family and i was taking pictures of the mountains and then everyone was freaking out and there was a bear but i didn't see it because my purple fingernails were in the way so my fingernails were the bears, man." okay, cool. unless you're fucking prepared to lay all that out in fucking connection
to the rest of the poem IN the poem, DON'T. INCLUDE. A LINE. LIKE THAT. if we, the readers, as a whole, aren't getting something, YOU are doing something wrong. the goal of a dairy is to write for yourself. the goal of SHARING writing is to, not only receive critique and feedback (which is my next issue), but you are putting it out there for OTHER PEOPLE to experience it. you're a fucking tour guide. you don't speak the native language to the foreigners. you speak their language, you make their language yours, and you fucking respect that the world is not here to understand your feelings
, we are here to feel our own feelings and we look at writing to help us do that etc. etc. so please, for the love of all that is good on this website, STOP saying things just to say them because it sounds good. and if there's actually an explanation behind something you say, MAKE THAT KNOWN, or else you have a lot of work to do. if your explanation can't hold up the integrity of the poem, move on. make it clear or make it gone
. (obviously there are times when being vague is okay and acceptable and the point of a poem, but that's ONLY when the subject is vague and in that situation, you as the writer, have a fucking responsibility to do the best explaining you can do without actually saying
it. there are other instances where being vague is okay but i don't have time to sit here and go through all of them with you. you should know when you're being clever, and when you're just being an idiot.)
another issue that goes along with just saying shit to sound cool, is using comparisons or concepts that are either a) very cliche and make no sense in the context you're talking about them in or b) very cliche and used in the same context, all the fucking time.
i am fucking tired of seeing shit about bones and constellations on this website. like it's okay every once in awhile when you have something ~'|**new*%^'~~~ to say but GODFUCKINGDAMMIT get creative
.examples: reflecting on the use of bones and constelltions
type a:the mcdonald's on 4th street was your middle ear bone in december
okay, that's obviously a little far fetched, but it makes my point. quit. comparing. every. thing. to. this 'you' person's bones.the french fries were constellations in the bag
every fucking thing that's jumbled/spread out does not have to be compared to a constellation. it makes no sense and it's weird.
(if you guys can't tell i'm hungry)
type b:i kept my dreams inside your bones, and when you smashed them, you smashed me too
yawn. you hide your dreams in your bones. how sensitive and protected you are. next. the constellation of freckles on your back/face/blah blah
IF ANYONE STILL USES THIS, THAT IS AN ISSUE
see what i mean?
it's like nobody is even fucking conscious of they're saying or writing. you should never be concerned with alluding to weird 'pretty' images that are vague as fuck, more than you are concerned with your message. the message is the meat, guys. the words are just the means we get that message out through. and obviously i'm not saying the words you choose aren't important. i'm saying quite the opposite, actually. diction and how you carry your poem/prose/whatever are so
fucking important. be careful. word wisely.
in summary, don't be stupid. if something you say is a long shot, either explain it and make it work or trash it. keep your audience in mind. remember your primary goal when you're sharing writing with the public is not only to share that work, but to make your work better, so you can share better in the future. it's a fucking beautiful cycle. get creative. don't sell out to overplayed images. don't try and take overplayed images and stick them on something random as hell to be ~different~. you have to fucking use your brains.
2. sure, i can rag on this website for churning out some real bullshit sometimes. but really, honestly, who's feeding into that bullshit? we are. we encourage it. we don't critique. we placate. we gorge the writers on here with compliments. i don't know about you guys, but i'm tired of just getting the same old, same old comments. yes, please let me know if you like my poems and can relate to them, but what else? what else would you like to see? what is something that can be worked on in this poem? what would you change and why? it's important to get input from other writers because, after all, like i've said a million fucking times already, no one, no one
is just here to keep a 'personal diary'. a personal diary is supposed to be a fucking private matter. in my opinion, i feel like most people who say that are just saying that so they can get away with shitty writing. because if it's just a 'diary' then there's no imposing standards on it, now is there? and when i say 'get away' with shitty writing, i mostly mean they are trying to get praise and confirmation from their peers. that comes from insecurity. we all know these writers. these are the writers, that when you make a respectable, well-informed critique, say 'yeah thanks good thoughts but this is my poem and my way is so much better than yours.' it's never stated just like that, but that's what's said, more or less. i used to be that poet. and hey, guess what, it was when i was really insecure and looking for confirmation of my goodness through praise of my work. so i know how this shit works. and guess what, buck-o? once you put that first draft of your poem out, it's not your poem anymore. it's all of ours to add input to, to analyze, and to send through the fucking furnace so all the bullshit burns off and you see the very sad, small, solid portion of your poem laying crumpled in the ashes of all your bullshit. that's good for you. if you're still getting angry when your work is criticized, then either a)you're a brat b)you're a brat c)you're a fucking brat. get over it. you're either here to feel good about yourself or become a better writer. just be honest. so we can all help you, or ignore you. this ideaology that 'i'm so important. look at me. me. me. me. i know you guys are SO fascinated by my life. peasants. praise me' makes me fucking sick. stop acting like you're blessing
us with your presence. what's really funny about these people is that they don't know that they are those people
i hope you know that i direct all this to myself too. people have a tendency, especially on this fucking website, to attack the critic by saying, 'wow you're so arrogant you think your shit doesn't stink, don't you?' no, no not at fucking all. stop looking for excuses to validate your need not to ever fucking make a mistake. we all have shit we need to work on on this website.
i don't know why you guys are here, but i'm still here because for me, this is the only community i have where i can meet with other writers and relate and write and read and cry and fume and feel and connect. and i'd really like to have it be that way all the time, not just with 1 out of 40 poems, and not with 1 out of 40 comments. please, when you see me being lazy in my writing, fucking point it out. tell me i can do better. and i'll do the same with you.
this site needs a major attitude adjustment. we're just a bunch of whiny teenagers seeing who can whine the loudest and do it in the most ridiculous way. please, stop. remember the message.